@bene maybe you could add in the opposing argument, and then say why you don't believe it's true. It might make people relate to it more :)

@StefanP this is really good and convincing, and makes the reader want to agree with what you're saying. :)

@DanielleF good, but not very passionate.

@bene because they dont agree

@bene this is very contriversial and can lead to a good essay, but there are many people who won't want to read this after your thesis

@leahs really good, and its clear to tell your opinion on this issue. You might want to make it a little more impactful on the reader.

@JenniferG This is a very clear thesis, and it's easy to tell where you stand. You might want to use more impactful vocabulary, though.

@StefanP this is really good, and can be argued well. Your reasons are very clear, too.

@Tyler_T this is really good and well worded, but I'm wondering what your sub tobics are, because you can't tell by your thesis.

loitering in pubic places, illegal because these people aren’t always homeless by their own right.

I believe the government should support the end of the tragedy of homelessness, and that aspects of homelessness, such as begging and loiter